Tuesday, January 26, 2010

Not just any Tuesday

No no...it's TEASER TUESDAY!!

This is the first page of something YOU WILL NOT RECOGNIZE.

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“It’s raining.”

He ignores me and changes lanes, his arms draped over the steering wheel. His cuticles are bloody rags. Boy.

“Only children bite their nails, Noel.”

No answer.

“It’s raining.”

His eyes flicker behind his sunglasses. “I’m aware.” He doesn’t close the sunroof.

The radio hisses soft static. We can’t agree on music. Drops of water bounce in and slide down the dashboard.

“Consequently, I’m getting wet.”

Noel finally cracks a smile. “Quiet now,” he says, but he turns the knob and the sunroof slides shut.

About half an hour ago we left the Baltimore Beltway and changed to softer suburban roads. Now we turn frequently and wait for the stoplights. The rain against the hood sounds like a typewriter. Noel’s ruined fingertips tap the steering wheel while I stare at a red light. The message is clear: we’re almost there.

“I’m thinking we don’t go tonight,” he says.

I look at him.

It’s not like I don’t understand his position. It’s just that my entire life is about not going places.

“I mean, it’s getting sort of late.” He indicates the 7:03 flashing beside the speedometer. “Maybe we just check into the hotel tonight. Call Mom and let her know we arrived all safe and sound. And worry about, you know, the family. Tomorrow.”

He’s freaking out. Unbelievable. Noel tends to cycle—-he goes from stagnant to hyperactive, like a bipolar toddler. Freaking out, however, is not part of either of these stages.

“You’re freaking out.”

“I’m not. I just don’t think it’s right to emotionally tax ourselves tonight.”

My fingers crawl into my pocket and I withdraw the two creased photographs. There’s Mariah, striking as always against the old electric factory I used as a backdrop. There’s Josh, trying to be serious for the camera, and I can see right into his mind...loyal, my ass...how could I have been so stupid...all he wanted to do was touch her. Always.

Noel snatches the picture out of my hands. “Especially considering how close you are to some kind of dementia.”

I cross my arms. “Shut up.”

“Look, you’re grieving,” he continues, and our green arrow lights up. We turn left. Noel makes his pretentious voice. “You’re grieving for a seemingly timeless relationship with the seemingly perfect best friend that disintegrated as you walked in on him undressing your girlfriend. Oh, Josh, how could you? Thirteen years of near-brotherhood washed down the drain. The shock, the anguish. Oh, to be sixteen and backstabbed again. These are the happiest days of your life, Ian. Lavish.”

“Have I mentioned shut up?”

He smiles.

“And you’re just trying to change the subject,” I say. “You’re seriously chickening out?”

He is no longer smiling. “Fuck off,” he says, the predictable shut-out. “We’re going tomorrow.”

I pull my knees up and stare out the window. I would do well to remember that Noel and I are not close. Sometimes we get along so well that I forget.

19 comments:

ChristaCarol Jones said...

I'm liking this. Love how it's raining and the sun roof is open. Also love the bloody cuticles, a perfect way to show the kind of nervous wreck Noel seems to be. Great visuals and way to pull in the reader with all the emotions going on. Me likey.

Lisa Desrochers said...

Okay, where's the rest? I'm ready. Bring it on...

You're such a tease! ;)

Rachel said...

Really good- I like it.
What's it to?

Anonymous said...

Brilliant.

That is all.
:D

Kimberly Job said...

Wow! You are a great writer. I love your blog.

Unknown said...

Fantastic! I love it!!! Look forward to more!

hannah moskowitz said...

aw, thank you, guys.

ALSO

why didn't I use tags?

off to fix that.

Anonymous said...

I'm stealing your voice, okay? Don't worry, you can keep your awesome characters and your fantastic storylines - I just want the voice. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE.

hannah moskowitz said...

WE CAN SHARE IT. I love sharing!

Amna said...

First and foremost: TEASE!

Second. I love your characterisation. You know that?

Vee said...

Awesome voice and awesome dialogue...And I want more, basically :D

Rachael said...

What is this from??? What's it about? :D

in which a girl reads said...

I love the voice! :D Amazingamazingamazing snip, such great dialogue as well :)

Steve MC said...

Great scene. Especially the unique dialogue - "I'm aware" and "Quiet now." And that killer last paragraph.

Nadine said...

Holy crap, you're awesome! You paint the characters so well, in just a few lines.

You rock.

MBee said...

Brothers can be such pains in the ass, can't they?
Got to love the love/hate relationships they often seem to have. You show it well :)

Just curious..Noel? is he a christmas baby? and is it pronounced as in the first noel? or more like a grassy knoll?

hannah moskowitz said...

He is indeed a Christmas baby, pronounced like the first Noel. He...erm...might be an angel. Maybe.

Unknown said...

I can't wait till Invincible Summer comes out. I love your writing :) As a seventeen-year-old writer who's nowhere near that good, I admire you haha

MBee said...

Awesome. I asked because that's the case of my best friend's father. He is a Christmas baby and has the same name altho it's prounced more like grassy knoll :)